Blog Fest Day 2!!!!
Second Day of the Blog Fest "I'm Hearing Voices" continues. Today's challenge is a 'dialogue only' introduction to characters in 250 words or less. Thanks Angie and Cassie Mae for making me think on this snowy hump day. :)
“Miss! Miss!”
“It’s Mrs.- Mrs. Daniel Clemmons. Agnes to my friends.”
“Well, Agnes, it’s so nice to meet you. I’m Susan Brown, the
head of the women’s league? Here at Pine Crest Baptist? You new in town, or
visiting?”
“Jut visiting. Stuck here a while. My husband’s moving some
cattle for a man up north.”
“I see. Well, I hope you like it here at Pine Crest. Did you
walk here? I don’t…see…anyone waiting for you.”
“I rode with Bella. She’s waiting outside.”
“Bella Stanley?”
“Umm, yeah. And she is waiting, I better…”
“YOU are the one staying with Bella? And the murderer?”
“The what?”
“Why Bella…is having relations
with a murderer. God help the girl, like having an affair with a buck and
getting a divorce wasn’t enough to tarnish the…the…woman…enough.”
“Affair? Divorce? Why, I. Bella never said anything of the
sort. And dear lord, Jack never mentioned any of that!”
“Why he’s the murderer! Jack, Jack Byron. They say he killed a Yankee. And I know it’s just a Yankee, but still it was a soul.”
“Jack Byron?! He’s my brother! He’s not a murderer!”
“Are you certain?”
“Yes, I’m certain. He’s my brother.”
“Did you know he was in prison?”
“Of course. But it wasn’t for murder.”
“Mmm, hmm. Well, do you realize that ever since Jack
appeared, no one has heard hide nor hair of Bella’s husband? Or rather, her ex-husband. Makes a body wonder.”
“Wonder what?”
“Why, wonder if the man has killed again.”
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Oooh, nice! The last line is great.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth--You have a real knack for this. What I love most about it is that I feel like I was introduced to more than two characters. And you threw in a little drama to boot! Awesome job :)
ReplyDeleteI agree with Angela, it was like being introduced to a whole cast of characters! I'm very intrigued by this exchange, and would love to read some more!
ReplyDeleteNice! You really do have a knack for this stuff. Excellent voice and really good gossip going on here. Love it!
ReplyDeleteOkay, you def. have a new fan. Monday could have been a fluke, but after reading this, you are obviously very talented!!-And I am a total 'writer snob'. haha I don't like that about myself, but I'm super picky and extremely honest, so when I say it's great-know that I will not say that about just anyone. Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteOh man! Yeah - that's once conversation I wouldn't want to have, but it'd be awesome to be a fly on the wall. *cringe* Just much suspense and mystery. LOVE IT!
ReplyDeleteI love the voice on this one! And the plot is presented very well. Great job - new follower :)
ReplyDeleteAhaha!! I didn't see this coming! I'm hooked!
ReplyDeleteThis is fantastic! Great voice! Nice job!
ReplyDelete*New Follower!* So nice to *meet* you!
*Kelly and Tasha*! Nice to meet you to. :)
ReplyDeleteAmber, I'm a shameful reading snob too, so I get it and really appreciate the compliment!
Ashley, thanks for hooking me up with Cassie and Angie- what great fun! And so very helpful too!
Leigh, Kyra, and Emily~ thanks. It means a lot to have such talented folks pat me on the head. :)
I wanted you to know you are in my top 10 for this challenge :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Angie. This has been a lot of fun. Thanks for taking the time to organize it.
ReplyDeleteoh. I love the way you have weaved the realtionships. Bella is dating the brother of the woman the other woman is accusing of murder. And it builds the tension.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sara :)
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